I'll only look at the grammar in this essay.
What is more important: appearance or personality
>needs to be in titlecase, whether that is in APA, MLA, Chicago, etc.
>you need ? in place of : and ? at the end
Humans are visual creatures, it's how we are made.
>needs ; after "creatures" instead of ,
You see no one can know what the inside of you is, only God can.
>needs , after "see"
Personality as we know it is just what you show people. You could present yourself to people in a good sense/view, but yet when you're alone you behave differently.
>"but yet" is redundant
>needs , after yet if you do include it
>needs , after "alone"
An example would be a pastor preaching against adultery but yet cheats on his wife in darkness.
>"but yet" is redundant
>needs , before "but"
>needs , after "yet"
Another example would be an abuser presenting himself to the world in a good way, but yet at home treats his loved ones differently.
>"but yet" is redundant
>needs , after "yet"
Not to mention around the world, they go to church, or other place where people congregate, hang out with their friends, peers, but yet once that is over and they go home, and are alone or believe that they are alone and no one can see them, they behave their true self in darkness some of them login to the internet and do/watch bad stuff, some of them do drugs.. Etc.
>"place" should be plural
>"but yet" is redundant
>needs , after "yet"
>needs . after "darkness"
>"darkness" needs to be capitalized
>missed a . in the ellipsis (...)
>etc. could be lowercase since it's not a sentence
What you do when you're alone is who you are. Seek change.
No one really knows who you are, what your real personality is, no one knows that.
>an — (em dash) would be better after "no one knows that" as in "No one really knows who you are, what your real personality is—no one knows that."
Only you do, and so does God.
Appearance or looks is determined by genetics, your genetic makeup plays a huge role in your social life.
>needs a ; after "genetics"
It is well known that people who are viewed as attractive have an easier life, people treat them well, show some respect, do them a favor, give them answers for their homework, etc. While ugly people, particularly ugly men, know the true nature of people, people would abuse you, treat you badly, deny you, be more likely to accuse you, stereotype you.
>"While" shouldn't be capitalized and needs a , before it
>"show more respect" instead of "some respect"
Tall men are viewed as attractive by women, and since they are viewed as attractive by women, women just throw themselves at them, letting the tall
men use them. And because the percentage of tall men 6ft+ is only 14% they compete for these types of men.
>needs , after "14%"
Basically Tall men have harems while short men have none.
>needs , after "Basically"
>"Tall" should not be capitalized
>needs , before "while"
The reason why women desire tall men, one could say is because they want tall kids.
>needs , after "one could say"
Women, at least the majority of women would rather be with a good looking Tall guy, who has a horrible personality is abuse, beats them, doesn't care about them, but at least his tee-hee, than a guy who has a good personality, loves god, but oh he just happens to be short.
>"good looking" needs to be hyphenated (-)
>needs , after "majority of women"
>"Tall" should not be capitalized
>needs , after "horrible personality"
>"abusive" and not "abuse"
>"his tee-hee"? What?
>"god" needs capitalization... unless you're referring to some non-Abrahamic deity
>needs , after "oh"
Women are more shallow than men, and one of the reasons why I suspect that there are conditions in a young age to value looks, it starts with toys such as Barbie dolls, then it moves to makeup.
>needs a ; after "looks"
The same can't be said for boys.
Let's take two people as an example. One is Indian, he works as a janitor and is 5'2, he's considered short.
>needs ; instead of , or at least an "and" before "he's considered short"
And his face is not good looking
>missing period (.)
The Second person is white, unemployed, and he's 6'4, he's considered tall.
>"Second" should not be capitalized
>needs ; before "he's considered tall" in place of ,
He Has a good looking face
>"Has" should not be capitalized
>"good looking" needs to be hyphenated (-)
>missing period (.)
If they both say the same thing, "like morning beautiful, how's your day" to a woman.
>the " needs to be before "morning," not before "like"
>"Morning, beautiful. How's your day?" is correct
The woman will react differently.
>needs , instead of the period in the previous sentence before "The" and so "The" should also be lowercase
She'll be creeped out by the first, and the reason is he's not considered attractive, but the second guy, who is considered attractive, she'll be blushing, and will be appreciative.
Looks also influence immigration/migration. Most people who are against immigration/migration one of the things that influence their thinking is that these people are not like them, they're different..
>needs , before "one of the things"
If you are ugly people will show you their prejudice, they'll be more openly racist, discriminatory than another person who is the same race as you, but happens to be considered attractive.
>needs , after "ugly"
>needs ; after "prejudice"
>there should not be a , in "you, but"
